some specific comments.
You need to describe more clearly your sample selection process including where you will look for your participants and what are the criteria for them.
You also need to explain and evaluate more the reasons of certain interview/survey selections – why are you using them? What are the pros and cons. Critique is generally very limited in your draft and that can be a serious issue in a dissertation at master level.
Also to address more clearly the three key questions that where described initially as an aim for the draft:
- Research instrument/s
- Data collection schedule,
- Plans for piloting your instrument if you have not already done so.